Friday, November 25, 2011

Twilight New Moon & Eclipse ReWOLFED Rewrite Summary

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YES, I WOULD HAVE combined these two thick books, they DO NOT need to be this long. Victoria will not yet have returned to Forks in the beginning of New Moon; and New Moon/Eclipse will END WITHOUT engaging her and an ARMY of newborn Vampires. As fascinating as all that was (I'm NOT being sarcastic here, the "newborn" stuff WAS good. You can expect that to be within this story in a different way, later). It was all just SO unnecessary for the plot of Twilight.

Our Twilight gang WILL deal with her, but not an army. Victoria isn't a strong enough Vampire to control, much less raise up, a newborn army like that by herself. She would need ALOT more help. Newborns aren't exactly cooperative. (Maybe if you're boinking them, they are, ha!) You can expect Victoria to hang out through BREAKING DAWN! Her storyline will be a secondary storyline throughout these two rewrites - as if both books were one, you'll see her as you saw her through "just New Moon".

Because of this, my timing on alot of things could probably be adjusted. But we'll just keep things basically within the timelines that we are all familiar with. This part of the story will seem like one long story instead of two separate ones.

JEEZ, the amount of money these professional companies could have saved just on hiring far less actors/actresses to tell this story, would have been a pretty big dollar amount. (Not that I wish for anything to change, I'm sure these "real" people have worked hard to earn those roles.)

There are several things I would have changed in this rewrite, but not necessarily everything. Again, THIS is a Vampire story and Bella is beyond obsessed or enthralled. And so is Edward! MOST of the main points of this story surrounding Bella & Edward would have remained intact.

First... I have NOT read New Moon NOR Eclipse (nor do I intend to at this point). However, I have already read through quite alot of them and I've watched the movies - which, I am WELL AWARE, do NOT even begin to explain everything in the detail I need.

That's Okay... Jacob is ending up to be the character that is changing the most. I thought it would be Edward/The Cullens. I'm kind of glad that I don't have much background on him because I've read that his story is pretty screwed up, too; and I'd like to fix it if I was to go out of my way to rewrite it.

In my mind, Jacob is very much based on a childhood friend of mine who *I* made mud pies with, ha! He was just your typical white boy with always-messed-up sandy blond hair; and he always wore sneakers, jeans and a white t-shirt. I lived in Southern California (Oceanside) at the time, and he was a surfer kid for sure! We would walk home from school together and he would show off by stepping on snails along the sidewalk just so I could yell at him and feel sorry for them. I was seven years old and I still remember his name to this day - Lee. I had the biggest crush on him for some silly reason!

JACOB, of course, doesn't look ANYTHING like Lee nor does he come from the same kind of culture. But, aren't we all pretty much the same inside no matter where we come from? Bella feels about Jacob the same way I felt about Lee. Everything else surrounding Jacob is going to HEAVILY rely on Taylor Lautner's movie version of Jacob, except there WILL BE alot of correcting surrounding him.

IF I was REALLY going to rewrite this saga, I would of course read through Stephenie's entire version. And, I only live a few hours from the real Forks, WA. I would probably have visited the town and the Quileute reservation. I grew up around reservations in the Midwest, and I had native friends growing up; but THIS culture would be different, and I would want to get to know them better in order to get to know Jacob better.

But, as it is... This is how I would have tried to fix the Quileute Tribe's Creation Oral History that is twisted into Twilight. And again, since I'm not actually doing this rewrite; I'm adding these little bits of information at the beginning before I start the actual summary of "New Moon ReVAMPED".

Jacob's Storyline ReWOLFED

As the original Quileute Tribe's creation oral history goes... Qwati, a being known as "The Transformer" comes to the mouth of the Quileute River; and finding no Humans there, decided to turn two wolves into Humans. At THAT time (thousands of years ago), animals walked like Humans do now except they were animals. (I've probably got that last detail explained a little foggy, but basically that's it).

So... WHAT IF we consider that THIS is actually what happened... And WHAT IF Qwati had ALSO provided a way for the tribe to protect themselves from other mystical and/or supernatural creatures that inhabited the world en masse at that point in time; by anointing some of them throughout their generations with the ability to temporarily REVERT/phase back into their ORIGINAL "mystical" form in order to protect the tribe?

The number of supernatural beings has significantly decreased throughout the ages and many have become extinct, but obviously not all of them. And Qwati's provision for these indigenous people wouldn't fizzle out with time. After all, THIS is a REAL story; and GODS don't abandon their children JUST because a bunch of TIME has gone by, ha!

These "Quileute Mystical Wolf Warriors" phase for ANY creature with a mythical/supernatural essence (NOT just Vampires, there will be no "cold ones" myth) that is ALSO a danger to them. BOTH intent to harm AND the need for a supernatural way for them to defend themselves against malevolent supernatural beings might have caused a member of their tribe to phase. IF we go ahead and make it that detailed; the tribe could live next to the Cullen's all this time, because they have no intent to harm. BUT something would have awakened SOMEONE'S internal mystical essence when James, Victoria and Laurent start hanging around.

Jacob is the son of a Chief. It makes sense that he would be the anointed one to begin with. Sorry Jake, I'm not going to give you the option to be an "Alpha". However, you'll be the leader of your own pack, at least for awhile. Maybe we'll give you a couple of mystical wolf buddies when Victoria starts to become a handful. BUT, in the beginning, I wouldn't make a "pack".

This kind of mystical-creature threat does not come around very often. HOWEVER, the tribe may phase "as many mystical warriors as needed" depending on the situation AND how many "anointed" tribe members are available at the time.

By the beginning of New Moon, Jacob's body is really starting to "wake up" because Victoria has her sights on Bella - who will be doing alot of hanging out at Jacob's place throughout New Moon.

Since it has been awhile since the Quileute's have had a visit from a supernatural creature - I was thinking that it might be cool for there maybe to be at least ONE other Quileute Tribe member - maybe an old man or woman - who had experienced this mystical phasing situation in decades past, who could mentor him. I'm not sure about that part, yet - maybe it's been so long, that these "mystical wolf warriors" have become legend for the tribe. Maybe they have to relearn about all this, themselves - that might be fun.

Jacob will also NOT turn into an actual wolf like they are in Stephenie's version of Twilight. He MIGHT look something like this, maybe a little more Human, yet; AND we would make him more "Quileute". (I wish I knew where I found this, sorry. I'll gladly give credit where credit us due if anyone can clue me in.)

The Quileute Tribe does NOT KNOW that The Cullen's are Vampires; although they probably suspect that there is something unusual about them like everyone else does. But, they are living in this world just as clueless as we all are. There is NO TREATY between the Quileute Tribe and the Cullen's.

Discovering that they are Vampires and deciding how they are going to respond to that would have been one of the climaxes in this rewrite. Can you imagine, us mere Humans, even a culture with a mystical history like this one; suddenly having to deal with the knowledge that things like Vampires REALLY DO exist? What WOULD we do about that? How would we respond? What would we really think about it?

You can expect a very heated discussion between Edward and Jacob when he finds out what they are - he's been in love with Bella all his life. Edward being a VAMPIRE is definitely a concern to him. And now Jacob has FANGS, too! ;>

BTW - Of COURSE VAMPIRES HAVE FANGS! I "get" that Stephenie was trying to make her Vampires blend into Human civilization; but couldn't she have tried a LITTLE harder, here? MY Twilight ReVAMPED Vampires WILL have incisor teeth that WILL extend into fangs when they feed. Bella is going to LOVE Edward's fangs (as well as her own), ha! 

The Volturi

You know what... The entire wonky Twilight saga storyline could ALSO easily have been done without bringing in the Volturi. They really are not NEEDED. Victoria is really all the Vampire conflict they need, and Bella has 2 guys to decide between, and then she gets married and has a surprise baby; then she is turned into a Vampire, herself. This is PLENTY, it could probably ALL have fit into ONE or TWO books! (*My* version would have been THREE longish books, not four.)

THAT's the story of Twilight... That's the part of Twilight that Stephenie Meyer really cared about and spent time on. She didn't care about rest of her characters OR her pretty story. ALL this winding stuff surrounding it, like the Wolfpack and the Volturi, was supposed to convince us all that this BAD, domestic goddess fairytale was supposed to be a "saga". And I know... at the moment I appear to be the ONLY PERSON who can see that.

HOWEVER, The Volturi are TOO DAMN COOL to leave out, LoL! PLUS, they WILL allow the story to continue past the birth of our beloved little hybrid. And isn't that one of the things we're all interested in - WHAT is it like for Bella to become AN ACTUAL Vampire? How would her and Edward's relationship change? How are they all going to fit this new little vamp baby into their lives? (You can expect my little vamp hybrid to be alot different.) WHAT IS Bella's POWER going to be? (Yeah, she's got a NEW ONE that she's gonna blow you away with!) And of course... WHOSE decision is it to decide whether this baby should exist or not?(BTW, DON'T count on Jacob doing any imprinting in this rewrite.)

But, I'm jumping ahead... I read through some about the Volturi in New Moon, and I thought Stephenie did a pretty good job of describing them; although Aro is the character that stands out the most to me. I liked how she aged this Vampire by making is hair "floaty", ha!

AND... I liked Aro's demeanor, he's a pretty powerful Vampire (HE probably could have raised up a newborn vamp army). He doesn't need to be mean to get the job done! He's chilling, and SO is his Adams-family, ha!

There isn't much I would change about The Volturi. I WOULD change them into real-make-believe Vampires like I would The Cullen's, but I don't think much rewriting would be needed for them. I WOULD have made them bigger in this rewrite. You could have expected them to BE AT THE WEDDING in Breaking Dawn! (Was I the only person who thought that situation would have been hysterical?) WHY wouldn't they come? Alice invited them, OF COURSE they would come! Aro would be DELIGHTED! LoL!

So, while you could have counted on "my style" of a rewrite on all these things. You could pretty much count on everything being "as it was in Stephenie's version of Twilight New Moon" UP UNTIL Jacob starts to pull away from Bella, EXCEPT:

New Moon & Eclipse Rewrite Summary

Things will pretty much stay the way they were at the beginning of New Moon. Bella and Edward's relationship will seem to have continued to flourish since we left our beloved couple (see "Meadow Scene below, this is where I would insert it, as if this was the beginning of Eclipse). Jacob will still kind of be in the background trying to get as much attention as he can from Bella. He'll still make her that little, carved wolf charm for her birthday. (I may have the wolf charm confused with the dream-catcher. The wolf charm is what I would have had him give her on "this" birthday". The dream-catcher/nightmare thingy will come later. ;)

In Twilight already, it would have been made clear that Jacob loves Bella; even if he doesn't quite realize it thoroughly yet, himself. But, she's got a boyfriend now and he's been trying to fight his feelings for her.

In FACT... Since Edward can READ MINDS... *I'm* thinking that HE would have SEEN that Jacob and Bella "have something" between them before this EVEN though she can't see it; and MAYBE that is one of the things that compels him to leave her. Talk about a sacrifice. Maybe he's HOPING they will get together. THIS nugget might give Edward & Jacob something to bond over, later; although they have a LONG way to go, ha! (I will acknowledge that Stephenie may very well have written this saga that way.)

In fact, YES... I am going to use the scene where Jacob gives Bella the wolf charm as THE THING that eventually convinces Edward that he really SHOULD leave Bella. While he IS irritated with Jacob while he is in the middle of that scene; it will replay in Edward's mind after Bella gets hurt at her Birthday Party.

Bella WOULD have had that dream featuring her Nana because she WOULD be concerned about "looking older than Edward". But, NO on Bella hating her Birthday. No, she won't LOVE it; but she won't have the high-level of disdain for it that she seems to have (in the movie, anyway, I would imagine her hatred for it is even more melodramatic in the books). I'm assuming that Stephenie was trying to put a spotlight on the age differences between Bella & Edward, which is GOOD! Of course Bella would be concerned about their age difference and her "looking older" someday; YES, the dream scene would be in here.

But, Bella is a little-too-over-the-top in a very turn-offish kind of way with regards to people giving her presents. YES, she IS VERY SHY (I know this, and I wrote her that way in my 1st chapter rewrite). BUT, she is ALSO 1) sensitive and perceptive enough to know that it is in THE GIVING of gifts that OTHER people, not just the recipient, receive joy; and 2) she's NO different than the REST OF US! Who the HECK among us doesn't like to be spoiled just a bit, once or twice a year?! *I*, for one, WANT to see Bella get spoiled on her Birthday, ha!

In my opinion, Stephenie just wrote all this silly Bella-birthday stuff into her version as YET another trick to try and make us all believe that she had intentionally written her heroine out to be selfless and shy. Bella is alot more gracious than Stephenie Meyer gave her credit for. In FACT, it is ONE OF THE MAIN THINGS about Bella that all of us Twilight Fans LOVE about her (not that you actually wrote her that way, Steph; but we can see that's what you were shooting for).

Edward & Bella in the Meadow Since Edward & Bella are in Senior Year now, I'm going to BUMP the beginning scene from ECLIPSE into the beginning of New Moon, but change it. The MEADOW is supposedly "the place" Edward & Bella fall in love, AND it should have more significant importance within the storyline. It is "their place". I would think things are that way in the books, maybe they are. I didn't really insert the meadow into my first summary rewrite; but I would have certainly made the meadow a "character object" within this story JUST like Bella's beloved truck, ha!

But, in this meadow scene, our couple is going to be discussing their post-graduation plans. Since I haven't thought out this entire saga yet, I'm not entirely sure where Bella & Edward might end up in college.

I know in the movie Alaska is mentioned, but since *I* am from Seattle and I could have written about that location better; I probably would have changed it to there. The climate is similar to Forks for the same reasons AND Seattle is a wonderfully eclectic and accepting place to get lost in. The "weirder" you are, the more readily you are accepted, ha!

YES, Bella IS interested in going to college (and she always has been); but I don't think she has a career focus in mind, yet. MANY people don't at this point in their lives. MAYBE she does; only Stephenie Meyer could tell us, for sure, ha! I know she mentions a "science program" to her mother at some point in the movie, but I don't really see Bella as a Science buff.

*I* think Stephenie was trying to convince us all that Bella was extra-smart for "being into" more cerebral subjects, like Science. I think she's more abstract in the way she likes to think. There is NOTHING WRONG with being a smart person AND being interested in something like art or music or writing, etc. It's NOT a "girly thing" to steer away from.

In *my* version of this rewrite, Bella kind of NEEDS to be more abstract in her way of thinking (NOT that she can't excel at BOTH cerebral AND abstract subjects). You'll see more about "why my Bella is that way" toward the end in Breaking Dawn. ;)

Bella and Edward will be talking about where they are going to go to college and their plans surrounding that. Bella is too young, Edward isn't thinking about marrying her yet. NOT that he isn't planning to marry her someday, ha! BUT, it's too soon for Bella and he KNOWS that. Edward is over a hundred years old AND he has so far demonstrated NOTHING BUT respect (and even admiration) for Bella "still growing up". He isn't thinking about marriage to this extent, YET. (I suppose it is easier for him to not have to go there yet, however, since my Bella isn't begging him to turn her.)

He IS thinking about "making every dream of her's come true" however, of course, ha!

And Bella isn't planning on EVER being without Edward at this point. I mean, she certainly isn't thinking about marrying him; but she isn't exactly planning on this relationship EVER ending, either. I don't think Bella is putting much - if any - thought into marriage at this point in her story. Stephenie obviously was, LoL!

YES, you could expect some good Edward-Bella romance in this scene anyway that would have reconnected us to their VERY SECRET (in case you haven't noticed, yet) forbidden romance, ha! Yes, Charlie and everyone else knows that they are a couple - BUT, NO ONE knows that Edward/The Cullen's are Vampires!

I don't remember mentioning yet that the MORE satiated Vampires are with HUMAN blood, the MORE normal the color of their skin appears to Humans. The more hungry they are, the "whiter" and more dead-looking their skin becomes. AND their eyes DO NOT change to "amber" when they are hungry; as COOL as that seemed, admittedly. My Vampire's eyes will STAY whatever color they originally where before they were changed into Humans; BUT they will darken and/or lighten depending on their state of hunger.

I'm making this change for a few different reasons, but NOT because I don't think the "amber-eyes" idea wasn't neat. I just think it would be far easier for these Vampires to live among Humans without their eyes being so strange. HOW many people do you know with amber eyes. PLUS, everyone knows that The Cullen's are not blood relatives. We Humans are NOT that dense. It makes no sense for the average Human who interacts with any of the Cullen's on a daily basis to not notice the changing color of their eyes.

But MORE IMPORTANTLY... I want The Volturi to be able to come to the wedding in Breaking Dawn, ha! Making their eyes a more believable color instead of red (which is ALSO kind of a cool Vamp-twist); will make it more possible for them to attend.

YES on Bella having a Birthday Party AND the paper-cut scene! Again, I've read some wonky things from people out here about that scene being silly. But, not ONLY does it provide Edward with a strong, BELIEVABLE reason to leave Bella in order to move the story along; but YEAH, that is part of what Twilight IS!

In some ways it IS corny on TOP OF being more than a little quirky, even comedic, at times. THAT's one of the charming things about The Twilight Saga! And besides, it IS a believable scene; and we're leaving as many believable scenes (that also actually apply to the storyline) of Stephenie's version in here that we can.

I don't know if Bella actually got a new stereo for the truck from Emmett in the book or not, but I loved that! BUT, shouldn't that gift for Bella have been from both Emmett AND Rosalie? (Maybe the book is different.) WHY was Rosalie forced to give Bella a separate gift at Alice's coaxing? I KNOW she is supposedly written to be a biotch in the books, but COME ON! She's supposedly MARRIED to Emmett, right? Why wouldn't it have been from both of them?

Also, Bella would have gotten a brand NEW CUSTOM-made-just-for-her backpack from Edward to replace her old one that he knows she has so far refused to replace because she has never been able to "find another one like it", ha! He'll throw the CD he made for her along with another new journal inside, as well.

And OH YEAH... Edward would have kidnapped Bella's truck at some earlier point; maybe he would have made it appear to have "broken down" and volunteered to fix it. He puts a new engine in it, has it repainted and the upholstery replaced, etc. Basically, he "spiffs it up" for her (that's probably when Emmett installed the new stereo, too). ;)

The trunk is something that NOT only Bella - but EDWARD - has an endearing spot for (as well as the rest of The Cullen's, ha!), because of what happened at the end when they first meet in the Chapter One: First Sight Rewrite. It's hysterical! I really DID NOT plan that out at all - it just came out like that, LoL!

In this rewrite, Edward would have had the truck sitting in front of her house as a surprise for Bella when she wakes up that morning on her birthday. She would have had to drive to school in it, ha! Edward would have (of course) asked Charlie for his permission; but Charlie will be just as surprised as Bella at just "how much" he does to the truck. He certainly hadn't mentioned a new engine, LoL!

But, after what almost happens to Bella at the party, we all know Edward's attitude changes. The truck is really the "only thing" he can't take away or erase about himself from Bella when he leaves her in order to "make it seem like he never existed". It's not like he can take the truck away from her, too. In fact, because of this reason, I'm not sure I would have Edward take anything away from Bella when he leaves. I'm not sure having him do that really effects Bella any differently. She would be deeply devastated when he leaves whether he takes anything or not.

As I said above, I would have made Victoria stay away for just a little while longer than in Stephenie's version; until AFTER Edward leaves (I realize that throws out the lying-deception thing that happens between Edward & Bella, but again, it was so unnecessary. Edward will have other opportunities to screw up. :)

I think Edward would have needed to be convinced that Victoria wasn't a threat to Bella any longer when he leaves. (I'm sure he expected the wolf pack to protect her in Stephenie's version, but they do not exist yet in this rewrite.) Victoria has been gone for awhile, and it's likely that she'll come looking for him instead of Bella. He'll make sure he is easy for her to find. In fact, before he completely leaves; I would imagine that The Cullen's would do some kind of sweep of the area just to make sure she hasn't been hanging around. Plus, they have probably been watching for her up to this point.

ALSO, I would imagine that Alice did some sort of futuristic read with her visions surrounding Bella before they left. BUT, since she CAN'T SEE JACOB because he will be different after he starts to phase; AND because he is the one who encounters Victoria and continues to encounter her throughout this story, she can't see anything surrounding Victoria yet.

BUT BEYOND that... Since we are changing Jacob's story, I think it will be more interesting if he starts to phase into his mystical-wolf self AFTER the Cullen's leave (I realize he does, but the pack is in place in SM's version). EVERYTHING surrounding it will be a complete surprise and mystery to him (and the Quileute Tribe), at first. You can expect Jacob's father, Billy, and the rest of the Quileute Tribal leaders to become involved in helping him to figure out what's going on with him. NONE of them have ever experienced anything like this happening before.

They will all be learning and discovering things about themselves through Jacob in many ways. After all, he is TRANSFORMING/reverting back into the ORIGINAL Quileute "state of being". And while it wouldn't take them long to recognize their own mystical history in what's happening with Jacob; YEAH, they would have to figure it out, and they would learn ALOT about themselves through that.

I would either 1) move already-created characters into these slots; or 2) create a few new ones. If I was actually rewriting this, I would take the time to work all that out (and you know what... I would PROBABLY also find a Quileute friend/collaborator to help me work all this stuff out believably with Jacob. You could also expect alot of things being told from Jacob's POV throughout these two books/rewrite.)

Jacob will essentially be FORCED to phase when Victoria starts to become a threat in order to protect Bella and his tribe. And THAT way, he and the tribe will be learning about Vampires BEFORE they realize that the Cullen's are Vampires. BELLA will be their beginning source of knowledge on this, although they will figure out how & where to expand their research.

AFTER The Cullen's return later, it will become a serious issue that will need to be discussed between them.Perhaps THIS is where Carlisle will need to explain his theory regarding "how they have a conscience" even though they are Vampires (Bella has probably already heard his story by this time).

The tribe will probably need a little more convincing beyond that... And MAYBE even CHARLIE is in on this conversation. Maybe THIS is where the "forbidden" part of the romance will come into play for Bella & Edward for awhile. BUT, I can see Charlie becoming "the voice of reason" during this conversation.

He might remind them all about various times Carlisle's path has crossed with theirs - like when someone's grandfather needed that emergency surgery, or when someone's kid got hurt in that automobile accident (PLUS his OWN experience with Carlisle saving BOTH him and Bella last year). They WILL be watching the Cullen's but they will "give them a chance" to prove themselves before they ask them to leave.

It won't matter - Charlie will NOT want Bella to be anywhere NEAR Edward, ha! Don't put too much into this idea, I'm really not sure if Charlie would have become involved since it is a tribe thing - but, they may have reached out for help and Charlie is someone they work with AND trust. I DO like inserting the "forbidden" part of this romance. That is one of the things Twilight gets hit for - HOW can it be about a forbidden romance when everyone is so supportive? It would almost have to be inserted here if it is going to become something - I'm really not sure yet, ha!

No trip for Bella & Edward to Florida, sorry (see above).
Don't worry though, Edward WILL meet Renee, LoL!

Edward Leaves Bella
This is another place where Stephenie gets hit alot. I haven't read the books but if they are written anything like the movie I WOULDN'T CHANGE A THING about how Bella responds to Edward leaving. Not only is she NOT expecting it; but again, Edward is a VAMPIRE and they are NOT ONLY in love, but metaphysically-enthralled with each other. From the movie perspective, anyway, Bella's reaction to Edward leaving isn't even SORT OF over the top, ha! It would be DEVASTATING to her.

Bella would need ALOT of "mourning" time and she would eventually need a REALLY GOOD diversion. Enter Jacob, one of her MOST dear friends! You could probably insert most of Stephenie Meyer's stuff in here since I haven't read it. I've heard Jacob is the most fleshed-out character she created. It's probably pretty good writing.

Bella and Jake will have a few intense conversations, but also alot of fun during this time. They both kind of need it right now.

Jacob starts to pull away from Bella when he starts to phase as Victoria gets serious in her intentions. That will, of course, be the reason for him pulling away from her (just like Stephenie wrote it). BUT, it will be MUCH more personal for him. He'll be alone, AND he'll be alot more clueless about "what is happening" to him. In many ways, he'll be shocked/shaken, at first.

Jacob is going to NEED Bella and she has gotten to the point where she kinda "needs to be needed". Their love story falls together easily, but incredibly slowly because of all this other "stuff" that is going on around them. Plus, it's gotten a late start AND Bella is still a little enthralled and certainly still in love with Edward, that isn't helping, either. It will end up developing just a little too slowly before Edward returns... But you all already know that.

I've read in LOTS of places, MANY fans feel that Bella should have chosen Jacob. Since I haven't read the books, I honestly couldn't tell you what my opinion would be. But, I bet it was pretty DARN hard for Stephenie to force herself to bring Bella back around to falling back into Edward when she was getting to the point of having to match the end of this story into Breaking Dawn (which, she had written previously). Just knowing that's how so many people feel about him; I may very well go back and read about him someday, JUST to find out which team I would actually be on, ha!

Jacob starts to pull away almost halfway through the book; and when he does start to pull away, Bella WILL be hurting again (I'm sure Stephenie wrote it this way, that's how it looks in the movie). She won't understand, all she will see/feel is the pain of his rejection. She'll start to fall back into her depression again (she isn't quite out of it to begin with). Her thoughts will automatically fall back toward missing Edward, except NOW it's DOUBLE the pain!

Bella will be hallucinating about Edward somehow through all of this, and she may have discovered that "danger" will instigate visions of him (she and Jake will still probably hop on the bikes); but Edward will also be heavy in her dreams. Jacob would have given Bella the dream-catcher/nightmare thingy by this time because she's told him about her dreams being heavy and bad for awhile.

BUT Bella's parents aren't going to give her the opportunity to completely sink back into this depression just because Jake has pulled away from her. And since Bella refuses to leave Forks. INCOMING MEREDITH! Yeah, you'll get to meet Bella's friend from Phoenix, Meredith! (YES, Bella's other friends from school are still around; but she's never really brought them into her life because she's always been wrapped up in Edward and then she sank into this depression. She has probably reached out to them before this time (Bella & Jessica going shopping and Mike, Jake and Bella going to the theater would still be in here); but Bella needs someone a little more... loud and annoying, ha! PLUS her parents like the idea of having someone with Bella almost constantly. They are really worried about her.)

Like I said above, Jacob has his hands full just trying to figure out what the heck is going on with him. It will take him WEEKS to get a grip; simply because he keeps changing involuntarily into this wolf warrior to chase some Human-monster thing. We'll see what happens through his POV alot during this time. I would be switching back and forth between him and Bella. We'll watch our wolf-Jacob kill LAURENT! AND it is during this time that his tribe will be trying to help him figure out what is going on with him.

Meredith is kind of a Godsend because she is such a whirlwind, literally. Renee has warned Charlie about her, but she pretty much blows everyone's mind that she meets without trying. Bella WILL have a hard time focusing on her depression with Meredith in the picture. Meredith will "take her away".

Meredith is actually surprised at how much she enjoys the great outdoors. She's ALWAYS been a city kid, and we will learn ALOT about her and more about why these two are such good friends. Meredith will take Bella to check up on Jacob one day, and she will insist that they have a conversation. Jacob and Meredith will not get along very well. She's 100% on Bella's side and she wants her friend to be happy. And she doesn't care whether he likes her or not.

Meredith will kind of fade back into the background for awhile after Bella and Jacob start talking and hanging out together again. She'll find all kinds of things to do on her own, like check out "the underground music capital of the World", SEATTLE! (She will also fall in love with the truck and borrow it alot, ha!) Charlie will actually have a hard time dealing with this because he is SUPPOSED to be responsible for Meredith; but Meredith takes off to Seattle for DAYS at a time! Renee, at first, has to constantly reassure him that she is a "free spirit" and that's just how she is, ha!)

Jacob will eventually confide in Bella as to what has been going on with him. She'll ask questions and figure out that he has probably been chasing Victoria. He'll take her to the tribal leaders where she will tell them "what she knows" about Victoria and Vampires. She will keep the part about "how" she knows all this vague, but it won't be hard for her.

They are well-aware of the strange "large animal attacks" that were happening last year; and both Charlie AND Bella had been attacked by one. And while they may try and push for more information, our girl will keep her mouth shut about the Cullens also being Vampires at first. In fact, they will NOT KNOW about the Cullens until after they return. But, JACOB will figure it out, easily - he'll be able to tell by the way they smell, now!

Meredith will eventually get Bella talking about Edward. It will be a pretty hard conversation about 3/4 of the way through the story; and Bella will realize and learn some pretty grown-up things about herself. In fact... IF this isn't TOO WEIRD for you to imagine, Bella & Meredith's conversation might sound alot like Bella & EDWARD's conversation at the end of Eclipse in the movie (minus the marriage proposal, ha!). She will tell Meredith how she felt when Edward and The Cullen's were around and how she doesn't feel like she'll ever really fit in here - MAYBE she doesn't even want to TRY to fit in, anymore. (It would be more than that, keep in mind this is a summary/rough draft,ha!)

It is toward the end of THIS conversation that VICTORIA is finally able to get her hands on BELLA!

Meredith has taken Bella up to the top of some cliffs, ha! (She's weird, she's really digging the great outdoors and they drove by them, once.) They are basically sitting up at the top (in broad, sunny daylight; Bella is thinking that Victoria isn't doing much hanging around) having a little picnic in this deep conversation; while Jacob is chasing a VERY daring, sparkling Victoria toward them!

Again, I don't know how this scene is written in the books, but it is HEARTSTOPPING in the movie! But, our Bella isn't going to be jumping into the water - Alice is GOING TO SEE (has already seen) Victoria actually picking Bella up off the ground and jumping OFF this cliff into the ocean with her!

What Alice WON'T see, of course, is our wolf-Jacob jumping in after her with his Human/Wolf self to SAVE Bella! Bella will not hit the water well and she will start to drift slowly off into unconsciousness, with her Edward hallucinations floating around her. Jacob may fight Victoria for a bit, although she may have let go of Bella as they were falling and swam off after she saw Jake following her. She probably didn't expect him to follow her. ;)

Meredith will watch all this in a panic and have already started to take the long way down to the beach. She is still a ways off when she sees Jacob (in his "just Human" form) carrying Bella up out of the water. She's limp and lifeless as he starts to do CPR on her.

By the time Meredith reaches them, Bella is starting to sputter up water and choke. They baby her for awhile and find her some warm clothes and then Jacob takes them home. He hasn't had a decent night's sleep in weeks. Not that he needs it as much; every time he phases, his body rejuvenates. But, it's not the same as a deep, hard sleep. (Btw, Bella and Jacob will already have had the "truck conversation" about Bella reminding him he's special, previously. It was originally at the end of this scene - and they WOULD have actually KISSED!)

And GUESS who is at Bella's place when they arrive. ALICE! (Was anyone else as tickled to see her the first time they watched this movie as *I* was? LoL!) Bella explains to Alice that Jacob saved her, and JACOB can SMELL that ALICE is a VAMPIRE! (But, he's not phasing because she has no intent to harm.)

There is a conversation about all this... And YEAH, Meredith is standing RIGHT THERE and they are all talking as if she isn't. Probably for the FIRST time in her life, SHE is flabbergasted, LoL! I have no idea how I would have actually written this scene. But in my mind, I see it kind of like a comedy. Jacob, Alice and Bella are all talking on top of each other explaining everything to each other (and arguing) while Meredith is standing there watching them and trying to decipher it all, ha!

And THEN... Just as the conversation starts getting even louder, Alice has her vision about Edward going to the Volturi to request his death. SHE is at first stunned to watch it; and then when she tells Bella what she just saw, panic ensues between Alice & Bella. (Alice sees things when people make decisions; so she would have seen Edward's decision when he MADE it. There is some time between then and when he has the opportunity to make the request.)

Bella takes Meredith up to her room with her. While she is changing her clothes, she gives Meredith instructions surrounding how to cover for her with regards to Charlie. Maybe they will call Charlie and tell him they are going to Seattle for a few days to hang out! In any case, THIS is something that Meredith is very good at, lying, ha! (We would have discovered all kinds of things about Meredith by this time.) But, she'll need to do it for a few days. It might work if Meredith is here, and if not; Bella will deal with the consequences with Charlie when she returns.

Jacob is NOT HAPPY about Bella leaving with Alice to go after Edward (of course). He'll be a little more insistent about it, even threaten to tell Charlie the truth about everything before YEAH, finally begging her to stay. Dang, that was a beautiful scene in the movie; well acted, Taylor! I was seriously feeling for him in that moment, ha! In this rewrite, THIS is when he tells Bella he loves her - in front of everyone, he doesn't care. He is the most desperate man on the planet at the moment.

But, we all know Bella "has to go".

I'm going to throw you "Team Jacob" fans a bone... IF I were to read this silly saga, and determine for myself that Bella REALLY WANTED to be with Jacob - I WOULD have rewritten it that way!

SO... Since I haven't read the story, all I have is the movie to fill in what happens next: Bella & Alice fly off to Italy to save Edward. I would imagine Stephenie had all kinds of things going through Bella's mind during this time. When I imagine what "my" Bella would have been thinking about...

The chaos that would be going through her mind would probably be mind-boggling. Her heart would be racing just at the thought of Edward possibly dying - much less committing suicide over HER! And being forced into the position of having to hurt Jacob that deeply on the fly is probably making her feel pretty BAD and guilty.

Bella and Alice may catch up a bit on the first leg of this trip, but I bet Bella is quiet for the most part. Maybe she is almost forced to start writing in her journal again. She'll write pages and pages of her thoughts down.

I think you can pretty much insert whatever Stephenie wrote in here about how Bella saves Edward and meets the Volturi, etc. I'm sure I would have put my own twist on things, but since I haven't fleshed this story out (because I haven't read it all the way through); I can't entirely tell you what I would do different. I thought the reunion kiss in that scene in the movie was a little... uneventful. I know, BAD me, ha! (I think that's the scene Rob & Kristen won "Best Kiss" for in New Moon, right?)

It's NOT the actual KISS that seemed off (NOR was it the buildup, I was cheering Bella through the fountain in her cute little canvas shoes to save Edward as loud as anyone in that moment, ha!); but the exchange of their conversation after the kiss... I don't really remember it exactly, but I remember sort of laughing and cringing at the same time. It was SO cheesy!

THIS is a VAMPIRE. Bella would/should have been able to tell JUST BY THAT FIRST REUNION KISS that Edward had been full of sh*t when he left her, LoL! NOT that our shy girl would have accused him of anything, she would still have been a little confused. But sorry New Moon movie crew, I was underwhelmed. ;) 

Let me think about it for a moment, maybe I can come up with an alternative something for you...

First, Bella's SCENT would have come to Edward BEFORE she gets to him. And while he may have thought at first that he was imagining it ("Heaven"); Bella wouldn't have had to do much convincing to get him inside once she throws herself on him (as ADORABLE as that was meant to be, I'm sure).

He would have probably PULLED her in, cornered her against a wall, and ATTACKED her, LoL! That kiss would have been INSANELY intense! It would have lingered and lingered... Edward would have been relieved beyond being able to express it.

He would have been voluntarily inhaling Bella's scent by the GULPS and NOT be in pain to do it. It would be like breathing in "real air" for him, like breathing in real air is for us Humans. His entire sensitivities surrounding Bella and her scent might have changed JUST in that moment because of his incredible relief at her being alive and "HERE"! Plus, now he CAN SEE what Alice is showing him in his mind. And while it doesn't quite clarify everything (how could it, LoL?), he is practically insane with joy!

I'm not even sure if I would have Edward & Bella say anything to each other during this kiss. Maybe, but not much. They are TOO BUSY to do much talking, ha!

But, in case you haven't noticed, yet; Edward is kind of being an *ss here. He has decided that NOT ONLY is he going to commit suicide; but he is going to make Humans aware of his monster-species in the process. He's showing disrespect for BOTH the Volturi as "royalty" of their species AND for the species of Vampires, as a whole.

THIS more than anything is pissing the Volturi off. Edward is obviously a serious security risk. They would WANT to make Edward an example and teach him a lesson by making a big deal out of Bella, afterwards. Killing her would be a pretty good lesson, you have to admit. ;>

I would have had Aro making a bigger deal about Edward's behavior in this rewrite, it wouldn't have been about "Bella knowing about Vampires". That's silly, ALOT of "make-believe" Humans KNOW about Vampires. Human Vampire SLAYERS are a relatively common thing. (That's how Carlysle started out, ha!)

IF this story was to continue on and on and on... I would have eventually made Bella a bridge between Humans and Vampires. As a Human in this scene, she "gets" that they are creatures that NEED to be respected for several reasons, not just because they could kill her in an instant. She will eventually, especially after she is changed into a Vampire, come to appreciate their existence in this world.

Bella would come to help Edward appreciate his species, and she would bring more awareness to Vampires by reminding them about their formerly-Human condition. NOT that she will change the way they live... But because she is a "new" Vampire of THIS generation, and she proves herself to be an intelligent, perceptive Vampire; AND because she has a Human-Vampire hybrid CHILD that gives her a reason for maintaining a connection to Humans; maybe she would eventually become sort of "Vampire Ambassador" for Humans, ha!

In any case, they are taken down into the lair of the Volturi (I don't know what Stephenie officially calls it, sorry); and I think everything pretty much happens just like I saw it in the movie, taking the exceptions above.

Aro will become fascinated with ALL three of these people! TWO of them are Vampires with VERY special powers AND part of Carlisle's family, who is an old friend; and this Human girl who may turn into a remarkable Vampire someday SOON (as promised).

As they are leaving the Volturi, there is a scene of tourists being lead down into the lair; and while nothing is shown about what happens to these people, you are given the impression that they are killed/eaten by the Vampires. Hmmm... My suspension of belief has a difficult time believing that these tourists just walk into Voltaire and don't walk out again without someone noticing, ever. It is a stationary place and people must constantly be reported missing from it. Maybe Stephenie created some sort of elaborate scheme surrounding it that makes sense.

You know... It just seems like this "saga" would have been SO much shorter and EASIER for you to write, if you had just spent ONE, GOOD half hour researching Vampires, Stephenie. It really is like you made things alot harder for yourself (as well as the rest of us) by NOT doing just a little BIT of research. Although, now that I think about it, THIS doesn't really have anything to do with you getting Vampire Lore wrong, does it? But it certainly seems like it was inserted into this spot in order to make us all BELIEVE that you knew what the heck you were talking about. LoL!

I don't think Bella would have needed to witness this "people getting killed by the Volturi" scene in order for her to be disturbed enough about these Vampires to dream about them. She probably can't stop dreaming about them for awhile just because they were so disturbing. She has now seen what REAL Vampires are like. James, Victoria and Laurent are kittens compared to these creatures. They are obviously powerful, they have made an impression, AND they have insisted that she be changed into a Vampire.

This is something Bella has, of course, thought about and talked about with Edward and Alice and probably a few more Cullen's by this time. I think the topic is something everyone has just kind of skirted up to this point. They've all worried a bit about how this relationship might work out over the long haul, but no one wanted to spoil the fun "falling in love" time for Edward & Bella.

Their families were HAPPY for them for awhile, BOTH of them, really. Charlie & Renee were a little relieved that Bella finally did something "normal" like get a boyfriend (even IF they don't know he's a Vampire yet, ha)! It had been FUN for Charlie to watch his daughter fall in love for the first time. It would have been fun for him to become the "concerned father" and do things like officially meet Edward, etc. He hasn't been able to help much with Bella growing up, and him being able to go through these last couple teenage years with her has been really special for him.

I think Bella would again be pretty quiet on the trip back to Forks. There would have been at least one good, but shortish, conversation between Edward and Bella; but he is worried now... He may very well have thoroughly screwed everything up, and NOW he realizes how ignorant he was to leave Bella in the first place. What he was hoping for when he left, for Bella to move on with her life; was a virtual impossibility, and it was cruel for him to leave her.

PLUS, he knew when he left her that he was breaking promises he had previously made to her, BIG ones. She may very well NEVER forgive him; and YEAH, the fact that he can't read her mind will be driving him CRAZY on this return trip home. Alice will be making extra efforts to smooth things over. If anyone has a good, long conversation during this return trip it would be between Edward and Alice.

Upon Returning to Forks

Since I haven't thought all this out, I'm really not sure how these scenes play out; but here's the rough draft:

Bella will re-hook up with Meredith in Seattle and drive home with her. Charlie will not know yet (but he will find out later), that Bella & Meredith have pulled this stunt and lied to him.

Jacob will immediately seek out the Cullen's when they return, and THIS is probably where he and Edward will have a heated conversation. Jacob will be very frustrated that he can't "just phase" into his wolf-self to engage Edward in a fight (because Edward has no intent to harm). Before he leaves, he will insist that they attend a tribal meeting to discuss their "Vampireness" with the leaders. I keep thinking that Charlie is going to be involved in all this, too...

BEFORE this meeting happens, Bella will seek Jacob out and they will have a long talk. She will have done ALOT of thinking about everything up to this point, and she will tell Jacob that she HAS made a decision about her future and who she wants to spend her life with. And while she isn't exactly falling all over Edward yet at this point because she's still pretty mixed up inside, she KNOWS "it's him... it's ALWAYS been him".

AND Bella knows her feelings about Edward will never change, now. Her feelings for Jake won't make any difference. (I liked this scene in Eclipse, but I'm combining these TWO break-up scenes with Jacob into ONE. The poor boy does NOT need to be tortured anymore, ha!) Bella knows that she needs to take care of this hanging string between her and Jake before she can move on with the rest of her life, eventually. She isn't in a hurry, ha!

This is a pretty hard conversation for both Bella AND Jake. It is always hard to be the one whose heart is getting broken; and it is ALMOST as painful to be the one doing the heartbreaking, especially for someone like Bella. She DOES love Jacob, yeah it's hard!

They will also discuss Edward being a Vampire. Bella will basically tell him, "Whatever happens will happen. I know what they are and I'm not afraid" (she'll be lying, of course, but us Twihards will completely forgive her, ha!).

The meeting will happen within the first couple of days after the Cullen's return. Everyone will be there, and it WON'T take place outside by a fire at night. It will start in the afternoon in a typical meeting room somewhere on the reservation with all the Quileute Tribal Leaders, Charlie, Jacob, The Cullen's (all of them), and Bella & Meredith (It will be really hard to keep Meredith out of all this. She is DYING to meet Edward, LoL!)

Meredith is on her way back to Phoenix in a few days, but she has many plans for returning to Seattle to go to school WITH Bella. AND, because Seattle is a music haven for her, she plans to see if she can convince her two "Bad Bach" band mates to join her to see if they can make a go of fame. YES, this girl has PLANS and the DRIVE to accomplish them!

The conversation will probably go alot like I spelled out above, with Carlisle explaining "why" they don't have the desire to feed off of Humans, etc. Charlie will stick up for them by remembering and reminding everyone about "what the Cullen's were like" before they left. But YES, he will be VERY concerned about Edward & Bella's relationship, now.

Toward the end of this meeting... Alice has a vision that Edward can also see. One of the things about Alice's visions, is that she doesn't necessarily see things "far ahead" UNLESS people have made decisions surrounding long-term things that affect their lives that far. AND she has been in Italy with all this stress surrounding Edward & Bella, she hasn't exactly been "tapped into" Victoria.

BUT, even if she isn't "watching" someone... IF there is something going on with them that is going to affect HER LIFE, her visions will automatically warn her. She doesn't have to access them. She probably COULD have seen this vision earlier, if she had.

Victoria has taken a few days off, but she is on her way and she is NOT ALONE. Incoming NEWBORNS, ha! Just a few, maybe 8 or 10, give or take. As far as Victoria knows, the only thing she has standing between her and Bella is JACOB; and he's already killed Laurent. So far, she hasn't been able to get past him, herself; so she's bringing reinforcements! By the way, Victoria has been hanging out up in Canada all this time and attacking Forks/Bella from that direction.

But STILL, she's planning on attacking the reservation and possibly Forks too (Wolf-Jake has REALLY pissed her off, ha!). She's pretty sure they will be able to kill Jacob, and then they can have free reign. Her intention is to turn her hungry new monsters LOOSE so that she can FINALLY get what she's been clawing for, BELLA. You can be sure she intends to sink her teeth into Bella and then go looking for Edward to torture him with her. But, things are not as they were the last time she was here.

The Cullen's have to both think and talk fast, Victoria is maybe a little over an hour away! They will explain the specialness of newborn Vampires and what Victoria's intentions are. The Tribe and Charlie will be pretty impressed with the unusual, supernatural abilities of the Cullen's (as well as relieved that they came back seemingly just in time). The Tribe will do an emergency gathering of people into shelters to keep them from getting "picked off" by Victoria's mini-army.

Charlie, Billy, Bella and Meredith will hole up with one group, and the rest of the tribal leaders will spread out in the shelters to keep people calm and informed. I'm not sure what all they would tell them, but I'm sure they would come up with something, ha!

Jacob suddenly has help with Victoria in the form of other Vampires that he really is not liking very well for alot of reasons. He and Edward will argue some more. They will all be shocked as Victoria and gang close in. FIVE more Quiluete's (pick your favorite ones!) revert into their mystical wolf form and join them at JUST the right time, of course, ha! Jacob will be incredibly relieved to see them. Not only for the extra help, but because he won't be fighting with "just the enemy", anymore.

There would be no posturing at the beginning of this battle. James was good at doing that, but Victoria has no patience for it at this point. She just wants that damn GIRL, LoL!

It IS evening by this time, and dark; and the Cullens & Jacob will meet Victoria and her newborn gang in a head-on collision. As the battle starts to heat up, Jacob's fellow wolf-warriors will join them and the fight will continue.

The newborns will be ferocious and they will definitely make this battle seem almost impossible for our heroes to be able to win, at times. MAYBE one of the wolf warriors go down, someone definitely gets hurt - but it wouldn't have to be Jacob, this time.

YES, Jasper's expertise WILL come in extra-handy! Not only will he still give a (much briefer) class on newborn Vampires, we'll watch him turn into a whirl of death during the battle, ha!

I read somewhere that the pack comes up with a similar phrasing about Jasper, but I don't remember it at the moment. It was cool.) But, they will take them out one by one... And Victoria will run away one last time, completely defeated and feeling like it.

The end of this battle would find the Cullens's and the wolf-warriors licking their wounds and finding a new appreciation for each other in all of this.

Charlie would no-doubt be paying attention and be a little impressed, too; although it won't change anything about his feelings about Edward and Bella needing to stay away from each other. Charlie will make it a point to make this clear to Edward before taking Bella & Meredith home. It won't make Edward feel that great, ha!

Bella is really NOT in a frame of mind to think too hard about Edward or Jacob, yet. She's just ready to breathe a sigh of relief and hang out with her friend for a few days before she leaves. Meredith has been a lifesaver for Bella, and they have grown closer. And while she does feel guilty about hurting Jacob, she is also relieved that they are moving on. And besides, MEREDITH is starting to talk about Jacob now as if she LIKES him. Bella is having a hard time imagining that working out, but she's pretty sure Meredith will move on to another diversion before she has to worry about Meredith breaking Jacob's heart, ha!

Edward isn't really around much. He IS close enough to watch alot of private conversations between Bella and Meredith, and he WILL go back to watching her house at night while she is sleeping. But Bella will have asked for a little time/space during their conversation on the plane back to Forks from Italy, and he will be giving her that space.

After Bella & Meredith say goodbye and she leaves (Charlie will take her to the airport); Bella will make her way to the meadow (I'm pretty sure she can drive the truck most of the way). She'll meet Edward there, of course... They won't have planned it, but it won't be a surprise for either of them to meet up like this.

I only have this roughly thought out, but here goes...

Edward has been feeling awfully bad all this time... He's better, because he has read alot of Meredith & Bella's conversations; AND he knows that Bella has broken Jacob's heart. But still, he can't read her mind and in many ways she is a complete mystery to him. He has been miserable!

They will have a really cool conversation about Bella forgiving Edward. After Edward apologizes to her (and you KNOW it will be a really good one!); Bella will tell him something like, "If it took you leaving me to figure out that we're supposed to be together, then it was worth the pain."

This is another thing that alot of ladies don't like about Bella, she seems to forgive Edward too easily afterwards. I don't know how Stephenie wrote it; but after that BIG DAMN "I F*#k~ng MISSED YOU" KISS at Voltaire, the ONLY thing Bella will need to forgive Edward is TIME. And she won't need much, just a "settling" of her emotions.

They are both STILL obsessed/enthralled with each other and STILL very much in love. And again, Edward is a VAMPIRE! Because of this, both he and Bella are on a much faster track than maybe they should be. Edward will go "over the top" like he often does and ask Bella to marry him toward the end of their conversation. But, Bella is AFRAID of marriage and she's already told Edward this long before. He's just hoping...

Bella will NOT say no, but she won't say yes, either. She'll say something along the lines of, "It's not like I'm planning on spending my life with anyone other than you, Edward. I just don't want anything to change." (Maybe it would be more about things feeling too soon. It would be an intense conversation, and this is just a rough draft.)

Edward will understand this, especially after what he has just put Bella through. He will be a little disappointed, BUT he will give Bella his mother's ring ANYWAY. (He'll have some romantic reasoning to go along with it.)

He'll put it on her right hand instead of her left, kind of like a commitment/promise ring instead of an engagement ring. He'll promise he'll NEVER leave her again - HE's making this commitment, NOW. Edward would wait forever for Bella to say "I Do", ha! Brace yourself.

Edward and Bella will make love at the end of this conversation! OMG, but she isn't married, yet! How DARE I?! Hold onto your panties, Ladies... ;>

LET's TALK about that RING, first, ha! I've read that ALOT of people HATED it... And admittedly, when it comes to "style" we each have our own idea about what Bella should be wearing at any given moment. (I, for one, am getting really sick of the color olive-green on Bella, LoL!) And ALSO admittedly... The ring DOES appear to adhere (whether accidentally or intentionally) to the timeframe of a Victorian engagement ring - which preceded the Edwardian era.

But, DAMN that ring Edward gives Bella in Twilight is UGLY as SIN! (My apologies to those of you who went out and bought one - to each their own, ha!) For *me*... It was another WEIRD thing about this "saga" that I saw, that my mind immediately rejected (like the baby's name). There was SOMETHING about it that just didn't seem right, ha!

So LATER... I'm reading an article just before Eclipse was getting ready to come out, about how the studio had paid some professional jeweler to CUSTOM-design an appropriate ring. Stephenie Meyer supposedly saw the ring, rejected it, drew a picture from her head, handed it to the person - and that boring, oval fantasy of STEPHENIE MEYER's is what we all got INSTEAD of the probably MUCH PRETTIER one the designer had originally came up with.

This was probably YET ANOTHER instance where Stephenie brushed aside a professional's opinion thinking that HER opinion was ALL THAT - when she REALLY shouldn't have, LoL! I have no idea what Edward's mother's ring would be like... But here are a few other options for those of us who would REALLY like a different one!

Edwardian time didn't last very long - for about as long as Edward Anthony Mason was alive as a Human, I think - from around late 1890 to early 1920's. So, SINCE his mother's ring was PROBABLY an heirloom that was handed down, it was probably a Victorian ring.

There were 3 different Victorian "ages" each with their own style. Edward's mother's ring could have been from any one of them depending on how long it had been in the family - although it COULD ALSO have been a NEW ring that her fiance had purchased or had made for her. In THAT case, it would have been an Edwardian and/or Gilded ring (since they lived in the US, apparently - it's AMAZING all the really NEAT things you learn while doing RESEARCH, ha!).

But, by the LOOK of the original ring, it would HAVE to be a Victorian ring - which could SOMETIMES be really simple and plain. THIS ring was supposed to be EDWARD'S MOTHER'S RING - NOT a boring ring that BELLA would pick out for herself OR one that Edward would have chosen FOR her. (PLUS, I SERIOUSLY doubt he has THAT BAD of taste even if he HAD picked it out. He would probably have LOST ALOT of us girls at that point, LoL!) Edwardian and/or Gilded rings are too ornate and pretty for Edward's mother's ring to be from that era.

Victorian Rings... Many times, Victorian engagement rings were cast in either silver or ROSE GOLD (which was very popular). They WERE sometimes very plain, but not always. They usually had a single stone; and then the "wedding ring" was added during the ceremony that consisted of TWO stones that surrounding the single one. Those stones represented the witnesses to the exchange of vows. This is apparently where "wedding sets" came into play. I had a hard time finding many antique ones that I liked still intact. Here's a pretty good link on the history of Victorian engagement rings.

But, there were also other options for engagement rings of the Victorian era. MOST people didn't have diamonds yet, and what they did have were small. The big blood diamonds started to pour into the world a little later... BIG diamonds during this time were reserved for ROYALTY and nobility. So alot of engagement rings were precious stones SOMETIMES accented with small diamonds:

The EARLIEST Victorian rings are considered to be "Georgian-Victorian". Here's a pretty one that IS "just diamonds" but they are all small.

And here's another similar one with a colored stone in the center of rose gold. I think THIS is one of *my* favorites.

This is another favorite and REALLY pretty with two deep red Garnet stones and seed pearls - here is the link to it so you can get a good look it it up close. This would apparently have been an actual wedding ring, but I bet it would have worked well as an engagement ring, too.

Here's are a few other pretty ring options that might have belonged to Edward's mother. Pick one or do a search for your own, ha!

YES, they WILL do the naughty ALL afternoon long, both in and out of the sunshine, LoL! Ok, I know what you ladies are all going to be thinking, 1) Does Edward's penis sparkle in the sun - of COURSE, LoL!; and 2) "What about Bella's virgin blood smearing all over the place?" Ick, I supposed we HAVE to think of that. But honestly, *I* wondered THAT about the Honeymoon!

I would think - BECAUSE Edward is a Vampire, it would be damn near impossible for him to have "virgin sex" with Bella without going into a frenzy. I don't think ANY Vampire could do that! So just glaze over this, Ladies... Like you did with Breaking Dawn. Isn't this where the "true love" part comes into play? Maybe there is a lake they can take a dip in, plus Bella has her backpack. She is ALWAYS (usually) prepared, ha! (Gosh, doesn't a HOT SPRINGS close by sound good!)

Vampire sex isn't quite the same as plain 'ol Human sex (not that Human sex isn't FUN ENOUGH, and not that I actually know about Vampire sex, ha!). But REALLY, it WOULD be DIFFERENT! Let's think about it for a moment...

Sure, Edward has a sliver of a soul... But it works differently now, and Vampires don't usually have one. Becoming a Vampire is a DISEASE or a CURSE, depending on your version of a Vampire. They can NEVER be cured of it because they have been so completely physically altered. (However, in the mystical world even the word "never" has it's exceptions - ie., Buffy's Angel and Spike. But, Buffy's Vampires are DEMONS and alot of mystical magics surround their existence.)

In this rewritten version of Twilight, I've been treating it more like a disease since we're trying to keep things simple and stay away from stuff like magic. The EXCEPTION to this rewritten Twilight Vampire disease is that a Human CAN KEEP a sliver of their soul that CAN INFLUENCE their Vampire personalities BASED ON "how" (not NECESSARILY "how well") that Human has nurtured their soul before they were changed.

This is why Vampires usually like to turn Humans who are "bad" or "evil" to begin with... They will probably turn into Vampires with the tendencies they had developed within themselves as a Human. Things like being able to lie really well or fight really well, etc.

They turn Humans who will compliment their soulless Vampire existence, and SIMPLY FEED off the extra-yummy ones they want to "feel like"; BECAUSE it is LIKELY that a person who smells better already HAS a partially-soul-fused spirit. They are REALLY (usually) too yummy for them NOT to kill. And besides, a completely soulless Vampire is MUCH more useful within the cadre, ha!

A Vampire can't "just start to care" about a Human while they are draining them - that wouldn't happen. They do NOT have "care" Human sensibilities. (Maybe THIS is more Alice & Jasper's issue - they seem to CARE more about the individual they are draining. The Cullen's seem to have compassion about Human life, in general.)

In the case of the Cullen Vamp family, Carlisle's POWERS of COMPASSION & FAITH instill the UNUSUAL sense of Human morality into their existence (Alice & Jaz each have their own reasons) - however large or small that may seem to them at times. I get the impression that it isn't THAT HARD for the Cullen's to step into their Vampire soullessness because it's got to be RIGHT on the edge and something they almost have to consciously work at to be aware of. (I LOVED how Rosalie SWOOPED in on her fiance to kill him in that wedding dress, LoL!)

THIS is probably where the effects of the re-animated blood that the Cullens drink really comes into play. It probably HELPS them maintain this awareness easier because it ALSO enhances - by SLIGHTLY "re-animating" - what little of a soul they have left inside of their bodies/brains.

I'm SORRY... Twilight's Cullen Family Vampires are the EXCEPTION to Vampires being soulless, evil creatures of the NIGHT - EVEN within TWILIGHT in this rewrite. Basically, I'm TAKING Vampires AND Werewolves BACK and LETTING us KEEP our idyllic ones at the SAME time, ha! :)

The MADDENING thing is that STEPHENIE could and SHOULD have DONE this! WHY and HOW her silly para-Vamps have become the mainstream NORM is mind-boggling to me! JEEZ, don't get me STARTED on how dysfunctional the Vampires ARE now in my beloved Sims 3 GAME! Twilight has penetrated SO MANY things in our culture. It wouldn't be so BAD if they were ACTUALLY WORTHY of such a STATUS!

A REWRITTEN Twilight Vampire is basically what a HUMAN would BE like on this planet WITHOUT a soul. It is a disease that strips a Human being of their soul - which has been provided for us to exist in a potentially harmonious life on the Earth, depending on how we use this gift. When the soul is destroyed, things like the ability to process physical sensations into emotion is destroyed along with it. Drinking blood is kind of a treatment for the symptoms of their disease.

For instance, a Vampire has a strong sense of smell. And while we Humans can smell a Thanksgiving Turkey filling up a house with YUMMY aromas AND feel warm and nostalgic as we remember previous Thanksgivings with our families - Vampires can't process the input INTO EMOTION from their MUCH stronger physical sensations surrounding ANYTHING. All they can do is smell is the turkey really really well!

MAYBE it might cause them to remember past Thanksgiving Dinners they had with their families while they were still Human; but they would no longer feel the warm feelings that originally went along with it - in fact, if anything, it would IRRITATE them that they don't feel them anymore. THAT's why Vamps don't usually hang out with us Humans. We aren't very "relatable" for them anymore - we're just yummy, ha!

IF a Vampire were to feed off a Human WHILE the Human was feeling these "nostalgic emotions" THEN they would both be able to feel that Human's life experience surrounding that, and POSSIBLY be able to feel just a little bit of their own if they ever had similar ones before they were a Vampire.

Without a soul, Vampires may SEEM magical and amazing (and they CAN be); but they lack their "third dimension". And when it comes down to it, they are in a great deal of ETERNAL emptiness and angst. Because even though their bodies have been changed into these more-suitable Vampire "spirit-only" filled vessels; their physical, soulless, formerly-Human bodies are PRIMAL and wild in comparison without a soul to provide them with the subtle, ENRICHING delicacies of HUMAN LIFE that their bodies CRAVE.

Draining someone of their life force is VERY MUCH like sex for them. They LOVE violence because those are STRONG, primal feelings for us Humans - fear, terror, horror, etc. They are ALSO attracted to really potent, innocent Humans like babies, children and VIRGINS, etc. for the same reasons - draining a child is the ONLY way they can really "feel" that innocence... and IF they have terrorized that child first, THEN it's GOURMET baby, ha!

The way the Cullen's drink Human blood - through this re-animated Human "dead" blood is VERY MUCH like being "vegetarians" for Vampires because they are NOT causing the Humans they eat to become traumatized, NOR are they hunting them down to indulge in just the really good ones that would no doubt TASTE MUCH better to them. BUT, Vampires don't NEED the soul essence of the Human blood they drink to be "wound up in terrifying sensations" - THAT's just something they do because of their primal, soulless nature. THIS is WHY the Cullens still HUNT. It helps to satisfy some of those primal desires - especially big game like Bears and Mountain Lions, I would imagine, ha!

And since our beloved Vamps aren't into hardcore horror because they all have a slice of their own souls and a sense of Human morality - they are just fine with the blood they drink. ANY other Vampires would find the blood they drink DISGUSTING in taste. (Alice would actually have imported in REAL (very expensive and WELL-made) Human blood wine for the Volturi and their other Vampire guests for the wedding because of this).

MUCH of what Edward has been experiencing with Bella up until this point has been within his "mystical Vampire essence" NOT his physical body - although he certainly has become aware of her and experiences her through his physical body. But what he feels is UNFILTERED through a Human soul. His Vampire feelings and emotions are much stronger and direct because he NO LONGER has his Human soul to filter things through. What soul he has left is FUSED with his spirit. It can no longer be the bridge between his body and his spirit that it once was.

Our SOUL is what gives us Humans our Human Dimension. The scent of BELLA's soul has been a remarkable pull for Edward for some strange reason since DAY ONE, LoL! WHY?!!! What POSSIBLE reason would she smell any more desirable to him than any other VIRGIN Human girl he has been going to school with?!

Hmmmm... There's something here, I can feel it coming, ha!

Well, if you've read the Chapter One Rewrite: Open Book... THIS Bella DOES smell EXTRA-good to Vampires, in general; because she REALLY is kind of different, in that she's an innocent young girl who also has sort of an unusual fragrance to her aura. She's grown up fast, she's "her own person" (which is TOO SOON but a FACT of LIFE for alot of us, ha!).

Bella is a girl who has ALL THE ANSWERS inside of her - she KNOWS this, she feels this, and she SEARCHES them out and WORKS them out when they are not clear to her. She doesn't rely on ANYONE for anything other than her immediate physical needs as a Human teenager - home, food, clothing, education, etc.

But INSIDE of herself... She is a completely contained, harmonious young Human with a heart/soul that she wears on the OUTSIDE of herself like a SHIELD. Dang, I'm just now realizing what a DECEPTIVE little Human Being Bella is, LoL!

She's shy, she's kind of introverted but she has a voice, she keeps things largely internal... BUT, she probably discovered a long time ago that her SOUL is the thing that protects her, and she doesn't let ANYTHING get through to her SPIRIT until it passes through this "soul shield" she has inadvertently set up!

She probably discovered LONG by now that pain is something that is going to come at her hard and steady throughout her life - ALONG with the good stuff. Her internal "wiring" may have readjusted itself so that she meets things head-on, GOOD or BAD, instead of letting them fester inside of her. I think that both highs and lows of life for Bella are more "normal" for her than the majority of us. They don't usually spike into uncontrollable outbursts or anything remotely close; and when they do, you KNOW she MEANS it. You've all met these calm, cool, collected types. I was married to one for awhile, they can be SO frustrating, LoL!

She knows that she feels bad during the lows and wonderful during the highs; but that feelings and emotions are temporary things that TELL us about ourselves and what's going on around us.

That's WHY she spends so much time with her journal. She KNOWS that feelings aren't necessarily something that defines you. They are part of the SOUL to USE as TOOLS to experience and navigate through this Human existence. Bella is someone who has figured out all this alot earlier than most people.

Bella's SOUL would RECOGNIZE (even if SHE doesn't realize it) that Edward IS a NATURAL ENEMY to her... And she would have been making conscience decision after decision during this rewrite to OVERRIDE the natural instincts of what her soul is telling her; BECAUSE her SPIRIT can STILL recognize what her soul WON'T allow to penetrate into her - that Edward's spirit is beautiful and VERY attractive to her - because it is a non-corporeal thing DIRECTLY connected to the source of ALL life & truth about EVERYTHING!

This is TRUE for both Vampires AND Humans, even though we experience this differently. Our Human souls CAN (and often DO) cloud our perceptions. 

THIS is how/why this Bella came up with this observation about Edward
shortly after meeting him in this rewrite (sometimes you don't realize things until AFTER the fact, ha!):

But, those eyes... and I couldn't shake the feeling of static electricity on my skin, as if I had connected with a live wire and my reaction was lingering.

I gazed into the empty space in the center of my room, letting the mental images in my head mix with my swirling emotions surrounding them. Then, I picked up my pen and wrote down what my heart saw...

Even the worst of us has a heart of gold;
And even the best of us sells our soul.

That was the first night I saw Edward Cullen in my dreams.

Neither Bella nor Edward would probably have been aware of all these details, of course... But, aren't they FUN? ;)

With all this... Bella is kind of content with "who she is" and the journey she's on in this life (for now). And while, SINCE she is a teenager, she is PROBABLY really looking forward to the rest of her life to "get on with it"... Part of her young, Human, INNOCENT soul has ALREADY fused with her spirit... and ANY Vampire would CRAVE her as SOON as they smelled her!

The fact that Edward has a MUCH harder time dealing with Bella's scent than his siblings, is because... It just so HAPPENS that BELLA is in a REALLY happy place the very first time Edward meets her. She's just moved to Forks and she was worried about that (and she still is, the first day of school is still coming in this rewrite AFTER she meets Edward and his siblings); BUT she and Charlie are working through their awkward, re-familiarizing themselves with each other time pretty well (she's even gotten a little richer, ha!); she's just gotten a nifty new TRUCK that she has fallen COMPLETELY in LOVE with; AND she's HANGING out with JACOB with a whole bunch of warm, wonderful emotions about HIM swirling around her.

And we ALL know that Bella is/was ATTRACTED to Jacob... And while their relationship hadn't gotten even close to where it COULD have gone (sorry, Team Jacob fans); the feelings and emotions she has going on in that moment surrounding EVERYTHING in her life would have been the thing seasoning her essence during those first few moments.

EVEN though they were not fully-developed within her yet, Edward would have been able to SENSE things like, "how Bella loves" and "what she's REALLY like behind that shield", etc. And while things would NOT have connected immediately in THAT moment, it would have been the SPARK that lights the fuse for them...

SINCE Edward's siblings (as well as James & Victoria) are ALREADY attached to their own lifemates... THAT part of Bella's scent wouldn't have been nearly as compelling to any of them.

How's that? ;)

Because Edward & Bella are still very connected to each other in a few different ways by now; Edward wouldn't become sexually turned-on until AFTER Bella is, because it is HER soul that is sort of fueling them both (because he has tasted her before and he will, no doubt, taste her again during this sexual escapade, ha!). Not only that, but it will also influence the tone of ALL their sexual encounters. Edward isn't exactly going to be in a position to push Bella away, ha!

I'm sure everyone has a different idea of how this first sexual encounter goes. But because it does NOT happen at the end of a LONG wedding day (DANG, exhaustion much, ha!) - in fact, it's probably late morning/early afternoon - AND they are just now making up after being apart for so long, etc. *I* see it as being sort of a rollercoaster ride with all kinds of subtle builds and crescendos mixed in with daring loop-DE-loos that make you scream! The in-between lulls would probably be just as fun. Yeah, Bella would really ENJOY crawling all over Edward; and Edward would really enjoy figuring out all the naughty, FUN things that make Bella's body go into convulsions, ha!

I also REALLY like the idea of a HOT SPRINGS close by... Edward probably knows about one and maybe he has already taken Bella there a couple of times... Maybe it is even inside of a cave that has a hole in the top OR a stone alcove so that the sun can still filter in a bit. ;)

Incidentally... My suspension of belief has a hard time believing that Bella would be covered in bruises the next day, NOT that this is a big deal. She may have a couple light ones, but Edward is a VAMPIRE... He knows EXACTLY how hard he can touch Bella at any given moment. He is VERY sensitive to the sensation of touch and how much pressure he can safely apply to her tender Human flesh. His Vampire reflexes would be as fast at determining and adjusting his touch on Bella as when he does anything physical - like, run, for instance. Vampires are NATURALLY precise.

KNOCK yourselves out all you "50 Shades of Grey" fans. JEEZ, I wonder HOW Twilight could have inspired another such ridiculous wanna-be book, LoL!

No, I really have absolutely NO desire to read these books, but it does tickle me inside that so many of you are finding them irresistible. You will NEVER think about SEX the same way, Ladies. LoL!


Getting back to this rewrite of Twilight... Stephenie REALLY does go overboard on the whole "Vampires can't resist Human blood" thing. MOST Vampires are VERY PICKY not just about WHO they turn, but WHO they feed off of. They walk among Humans until they find one that they want to "feel like" for awhile. Some of us are probably turn-off's for them, ha!
Humans are NOT usually THAT HARD for them to resist - especially if they are satiated. I'm SURE Edward is making sure he's keeping himself tapped, ha! PLUS, his Vampire sensitivities have altered a bit since all the scary stuff that happened between them in New Moon. It is EASIER for him now - still not simple, but it wouldn't be nearly as difficult for him to resist Bella now than when they first met. THIS is how we can all brush off the almost-too-hard-virgin-blood stuff at the beginning of this...

Edward is going to have a VERY rare, once-in-a-Vampire-lifetime experience. Bella DOES fuel them both and it WILL be the catalyst for him; but HE has NEVER had sex before as a Vampire (and apparently, not as a Human before he was changed, either). As such, BECAUSE of the side-effects of this "re-animated" blood that they drink; he will actually reach his OWN physical orgasm the VERY first time he climaxes BECAUSE of this little stash of Human sperm that is still inside of him from before he was turned into a Vampire.

PLUS, he is probably pretty satiated with this re-animated blood they drink, PLUS he's probably sparkling NAKED in the SUN - when his Vampire body is most strong in every way - physically, mystically, metaphysically, etc. What little of his own soul he has left would be about as bright as it could possibly get inside of him. He is at JUST the right time and place where his body is in harmony inside and out - everything is working perfectly. (Incidentally, this is the closest thing a Vampire can hope to get to experiencing a Human existence - when they are both satiated with Human blood AND their bodies are simmering in sunlight! A seriously damaged Vampire can do this to help heal themselves faster.)

NORMALLY, Vampires do NOT discharge anything when they have sex - they can't; they don't have anything to spew forth, ha! They MAY sort of lubricate themselves when they are excited - after all, they do have saliva and their eyes stay moisturized, etc. But their bodies are not capable of producing semen or cum.

That's part of "dying" for them... Not ONLY are their bodies DEAD/changed inside; but their bodies CAN'T create LIFE without having a SOUL to contribute to a baby. Edward has a SLIVER of a soul that can NO LONGER work the way it used to - it is no longer a bridge between his physical body and soul, anymore... HOWEVER, since Edward's sperm were created inside of his body WHILE he was still Human; they would have carried his Human DNA AND the Human soul-essence that he had when he was alive - JUST like his blood would have had!

When a Vampire reaches an orgasm it is (usually) a very primal/spiritual thing - it happens MOSTLY deep inside the mystical part of them, but it does happen through their physical bodies. They certainly feel it, but their physical bodies don't nearly as much - make sense?

ALSO, it would probably be a pretty common thing for them to climax at the same time because they are so connected to each other - especially since Bella is still a Human with a HOT soul. Edward would feel EVERY LITTLE THING that she does, and everything Bella feels would be amplified by Edward's mystical essence. Sex is pretty much a win-win situation for both of them, ha! After they are both Vampires, I'm pretty sure it's more of a marathon session with one huge, unifying BANG at the end!

But sex isn't something they are normally very interested in. KILLING is sex for them - draining someone of their life force - THAT's what they (usually) LIVE for! THIS is WHY Edward has never felt compelled to have sex with anyone before now. His sexual inactivity wouldn't seem nearly as strange to Vampires as it does to us Humans.

So yeah, Edward will NEVER cum like that again! I'm pretty sure he isn't quite prepared for the JOLT, but he'll manage, LoL!

Every single little romantic (or naughty) thing you can think up for them to say or do you can insert into here since I'm not writing it out, LoL!

This may gross you out a bit, but Edward WOULD drink some of Bella's blood BECAUSE, for Vampires, that's how THEY connect to Humans AND each other. Bella won't drink Edward's blood - although she could if she wanted to, she'd probably get an even bigger bang out of her first time, ha! In fact, if you REALLY want to see them get wild & crazy - go ahead and include this in YOUR hot little fantasy. Not only would Edward's blood heal Bella in places that she would probably like to have conveniently and immediately healed; but it WOULD sort of TRIPLE the BANG(S) for them both! ;)

Vampires are NOT frozen or cold, they are DEAD and room temperature. So while Edward's skin IS harder - it's more like thick, smooth leather. I've been calling it "marbled-leathery" skin in here since you're all used to the "marble" thing. Vampires are not stone or ice. Even though their skin IS thick and tough, it would be ALOT more like leather than marble - BECAUSE it is more what Human "turned" skin would BE like. It wouldn't turn into something completely different. When they get a deep cut, they WILL bleed, just like a Human.

Their veins still exist inside of them - that's how the blood they drink gets distributed throughout their Vampire bodies. The soul essence of Human blood slowly absorbs into their tissues through their veins. The physical parts of blood like plasma, red blood cells and white blood cells eventually becomes annihilated by their Vampire "disease" as the soul-essence gets used up.

SO, that means that they can sink their teeth into each other as Vampires, even, and share their blood. If Vampires want to be REALLY close with another Vampire they have not changed - they will exchange their blood essence in this way. ALL the other sexually-active Cullen's probably do this (although Carlisle and Esme probably wouldn't need to because he changed her. That doesn't mean they wouldn't do it, anyway, ha! :)

This is ALSO the REASON WHY male Vampires CAN get an erection and female Vampires can become sexually aroused - but NOT ejaculate OR reach a PHYSICAL orgasm. Because their veins still exist inside of them AND they ARE STILL being used to carry blood - it IS a similar function. (Vampires can't even get it UP according to some people because there is supposedly no blood flow to the sex organs.)

IF they become sexually turned on "just right" (there may be lots of ways, but sipping on Bella's sexually-turned on BLOOD would certainly do it for Edward!); the blood in their veins would flow down into their sexual organs. That means that male Vampires DO NOT become sexually turned-on NEARLY as EASY as a Human male - simply because their Vampire sensibilities are different AND their bodies work differently, now! AND, since NONE of their reproductive organs are working (because they are supposed to be DEAD) - NO sexually reproductive body fluids can be created within them, so there is no way for them (usually) to reach a physical climax.

SORRY traditional Vampire Lore extremists! BTW, Ladies... THIS is HOW you "alter lore" to change "traditional" literary things INTO your OWN within your BELOVED storylines - you EXPLAIN why/how YOUR nifty Vamps are DIFFERENT!

You don't just bulldoze your way through people's intelligence, brush off just about EVERYTHING about Vampires that IDENTIFIES them as VAMPIRES, and bastardize all the hard work and CHERISHED creativity that came PREVIOUSLY just because YOU can't handle dealing with the disturbing topics of BLOOD and EVIL! You should have KEPT this stupid story if you couldn't handle it, Stephenie. (Oh that's right, you were "just lazy".) *I*, for one, REALLY WISH you WOULD have!

Another "thing" about Vampire sex... It doesn't need to happen NEARLY as often. I've heard ALOT of people going on and on about "how much sex" is in Breaking Dawn. It's not JUST that sex with a Vampire is extra-fun; but it ALSO LINGERS...

As a Human, Bella would feel like she is enjoying the most exquisite afterglow for several DAYS after every sexual encounter with Edward; and so would he because of the mystical/metaphysical bond between them. It WON'T be something they are constantly craving either before OR after Bella changes into a Vampire. (Unless YOUR afterglows are different than mine are.) It would of course be even more different yet, however. We'll talk about Vamp/Vamp sex later in the Breaking Dawn rewrite, ha!

SEX isn't all THIS version of the Twilight Saga is about, BUT you could have expected it to be AT LEAST a LITTLE steamy!

Sex without actually having sex... What a tease, and how RUDE it was for you to leave everyone hanging on the edge of paradise like that, Stephenie, ha! (Maybe I'll take the time to write this out for you all sometime so you can see what this would have been like).

AFTERWARDS, Bella changes her mind and suggests to Edward that he should "ask her again". He doesn't even SORT of hesitate! He manages to come up with an even more romantic way to ask her to marry him off the top of his head, and Bella of course says YES! (And yeah, it's a GOOD THING, too, Ha!)

AND... While our beloved, madly-back-in-love couple wind down this PERFECT, BEAUTIFUL day... We will cut to Victoria intercepting Meredith at the Seattle airport.

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